I suggest you replace the @3 and @0 with @0 and @1 respectively. Still, this is quite faithful to the original!
If I replace @0 with @1 it will not only clash with @11 but take off the square-ish feel that @0 gives
And @3 is the closest thing to the intro bells for the original song.
As for the echoes tho, it is what makes the song a bit less empty as it would be without it.
Appreciated the feedback anyway