I have been following the progress of this story for part of it, and I'm impressed. There is a lot of creativity going on here, a lot of good ideas. As a sci-fi/fantasy fan, I can honestly say that this story/novel would stand out even if it were not written by someone I know. It's the kind of story I could really enjoy. But whoever reads this, even if you aren't interested in science fiction, you should still give this a read.

To Superderek personally:

Keep up the good work. I like the story, and I like your ideas and thought processes. The Dimension Destiny Project, in my opinion, is quite an original, unique piece of literature. I wish I could write like that...actually, I think I probably do have the ability to write like that, but maybe not the internal drive. I'm hoping that hanging around you enough will change that. (Being less busy with other stuff wouldn't hurt either.) I like the characters you've created; they seem like rather interesting people, and I'm curious to see how you will develop them as the story progresses. The places and things, on the other hand...well, those are very interesting as well. Again, I'm curious to see how you will expand on these ideas, come up with more properties of Golagoo and describe the Dimension of Destiny in more detail, etc. I look forward to future installments (hehe, and since I'm a VIP, I get extra information about the story)!

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I've read part of the first page, and this story, is actually one of the best I've ever read! Although Microsoft word's spell and grammar check screws up a little, it was correct so far with one grammatical error.



should be "The research has begun"

The story is awesome.

Well I must say, even though I only read the prelude the story is interesting so far. I'll read it more when I have time so other than that nice job so far!

Nice bios. I like the character descriptions...and the characters. They all, even Mazon, sound like people that one could relate to in real life. But yeah, I think you did a pretty decent job of making the descriptions short, yet to the point. Maybe it would be a good idea to update their DimensionWiki pages with those. (And isn't Leasha's last name Brightdaze?)

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Thanks for the comment imamelia.

Well, I got some more updates that I have been saving and whatnot. Here's some maps of the world I've been doing:



Please note that those are very alpha-ish maps.


More details are still being done on better maps but those kind of give an idea.
Those maps have good stories to them that I am happy to share.

First of all, you will probably notice how Planet Destiny is way way big and then go to think, "But that would mean the planet has 50 times more gravity or something.", and the answer to that is almost simple but yet complicated. The world is in another dimension where laws are slightly different as you know. After all, the Albu de Folraise has the power to create and destroy all into nothing which already breaks one important one already. So perhaps that may explain why the gravity is relatively the same as Earth.

But there is also several other factors involving the gravity, air, and everything else- keeping it all in balance. The Albu de Folraise seems to be a power keeping the world and dimension in check and balanced. The world is spinning just fast enough for there to be just around the same gravity as Earth and doing other things like keeping hours of light around the same as Earth.

Planet Destiny has a sun very much like our own. How much their size is compared to each other is unknown but the distance is guessed to be the same since the world isn't frying up or freezing. The world is still quite unknown to most humans- even to Geovanni who traveled with a few explorers who also named some of the continents after themselves.

Two key explorers went with Geovanni. Their names were Don Teller and Vincent Teller, who are also brothers. Vincent Teller named the continent known as Ventara after his name and his wife's first name. Although, it was named while he went by the nickname Vent Teller because he was known to get angry easy; which ironically is the name for some of the mountains in Ventara due to the way they are unpredictably unstable at times and sometimes cause landslides and avalanches. Although he gets angry easily, his wife Tara always was there to give him the peace of mind needed.

Don Teller was much different. He was quiet and to himself often due to his nature of being slightly shy but he was an artistic person who enjoyed mountains such as this. So when he first seen the beauty within Donatella he was more than overjoyed to undertake exploring this wondrous land. The northern part of Donatella is packed with mountains of extreme beauty and danger. Though, there is one big thing to now note Donatella on.

That is, the fact that now Donatella has a huge gash almost splitting it into two. When they first discovered the land around them, Donatella had no such gash. This in fact happened right around after Geovanni's disappearance and when Mazon went to explore the land his grandfather explored. He wanted to test the power of the Albu de Folraise and what better place than Planet Destiny? 'Code: Gash' was the name of the experiment that went on that almost nearly destroyed Planet Destiny- for if it was not for its mass and size, it would of been destroyed if it had been Earth.

What you now see is the remains of that experiment. The power of the Albu de Folraise went deep into Planet Destiny; the power released went hundreds of thousands of miles deep almost ripping the world in two. When it almost cleaved Donatella in two, it also pushed some of the land upward, creating many new mountain ranges previously not around. Some of those mountains are as high as around ten thousand miles high. That is much MUCH bigger than Mount Everest (Only about 5 and a half miles above sea level) although many mountains of the deep sea are much bigger. Of course, that also left the part of the ocean, where most of the energy went, very deep. There is no telling what could possibly be down there to explore but it is known that another continent previously unknown to the explorers of the past was also effected.

It is believed that the land around what is known as The Twin Islands of the Void used to actually be a part of what was also previously unknown which is now known as Masteria. But Mazon's experiment he ordered Lab 37 to do almost destroyed the whole area leaving nothing but two islands (Which compared to the rest of the world is nothing but islands but to Earth would be good sized continents.) and a very dangerous area as the Grand Eye. The Grand Eye is believed to contain the remains of the power created in the experiment, continually sucking the whole world towards it as if it was some sort of black hole.

The Grand Eye is more unnatural than most would think. It is more than just some vortex in the ocean, it is actually swallowing land into the unknown. Thus, that is why the two islands around the Grand Eye are named the way they are. It is predicted that those islands may not be there someday very soon due to the nature of the Grand Eye. The Grand Eye's size is currently unknown because no one ever dares to get near it for the fear they may be sucked into some void. But it is guessed to be around the size of half of Australia.

Masteria is what Mazon would call his capital of that world. Much of it is still very unknown because the original explorers never discovered it. Mazon discovered it long before the experiment and named it Masteria, because from there he would master his new found power of the Albu de Folraise. Masteria is also connected to land unknown which is also called The Great Unknown.

Most of the planet is unknown due to the very nature of the planet itself and the fact they seem to have trouble trying to get a satellite to navigate around the world and take images. They were either reported destroyed by something unknown or reported missing somehow. However, they guess the location of the discovered land is like you see on the map because of where the sun is positioned and everything. Now, the rest of the world is also unknown for other reasons.

There appears to be some sort of strange fog bordering the Great Unknown that somehow ends up making people that travel into it appear out of it at the location they entered facing the opposite direction. Many don't know the cause but most just shrug it off but some believe something mysterious is at work...


There's much, much more to tell but you will have to wait until next update. The more posts, the sooner I may respond with the better maps and details.

Edit: Disabled Layout.

Well, as I said on IRC, this is pretty cool. I like your maps, and I like the story behind the places. I'm curious to see how you will work the geological features of Planet Destiny into the story...things like that usually interest me.

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Ventara REVEALED!
Here's some information about Ventara, one of the many continents of the Planet Destiny. Here's the map of some areas:

There's much to still show and I am working out many things as of this post. However, here's a little bit of conversation/background.

<Derek> I have plans for where certain rivers will be.
<Derek> Also some of the names are temporarily but some of them I actually like.
<imamelia> Nice.
<imamelia> You switched Upper and Lower Hunfador...
<Derek> Actually, the higher and lower is named after how high up they are.
<imamelia> Oh.
<imamelia> So Upper Hunfador simply has a higher altitude?
<Derek> A much higher altitude, yes.
<Derek> It is like going up a hill or mountain.
<Derek> Mount Longar is the pass into the Lower and Upper Hunfador.
<imamelia> I see.
<Derek> It is like a valley within a mountain. (Mount Longar territory)
<imamelia> Interesting.
<Derek> When you come to The Dimension of Destiny, you enter from the Grand Portal in Volda Forgen Meadow. The name comes from the language of Kingrayons.
<Derek> I am still working things like that out. Like its meaning.
<Derek> Volda Forgen Meadow is almost completely surrounded by Mountains.
<Derek> Shadow Bark Forest is one of the few areas to go to from there.
<Derek> I will soon put in where Mountains are so it is easier to tell.
<Derek> Another interesting place I'd like to talk about is Glynn. It is like a country made and controlled by Lord Mazon. It is one of his experimental countries to see how well it can prosper under his influence.
<Derek> One big thing I should mention is that throughout Planet Destiny Mazon has banned the use of higher tech like computers and stuff.
<Derek> So throughout the world places in some way look 'medieval' or like knights and stuff.
<imamelia> Huh. Why did he do that?
<imamelia> So they wouldn't be able to revolt as easily?
<Derek> Through many experiments, most have forgotten higher tech or didn't even care about it anymore.
<Derek> His main reason is because people would keep abusing it and it would lead to "swift spread of evil".
<Derek> With things "more grounded", he could keep things under control easier.
<Derek> Ventara alone is very huge.
<Derek> With certain people spread out, he hopes to discover behaviors that he could rid that causes crime and revolts.
<Derek> However, his methods at times are very cruel.
<Derek> He sends some of his experiments to attack some of the cities.
<Derek> Then again, most of his actions are because he has truly lost his mind and now has a twisted sense of what is right and wrong.
<Derek> Some of his actions he believes is right because he does it and thinks that he saves more lives in the long run.
<Derek> One such place that is a breeding ground of his experiments is Shadow Bark Forest.
<Derek> When I get to releasing more details, it will become a very memorable place.
<Derek> And you probably remember from some time ago that some of Lord Mazon's experiments are live creations of creatures of fantasy like dragons and other even more feared creatures.
<imamelia> Yeah.
<imamelia> I know you mentioned dragons, at least.
<Derek> You can probably tell where some of those dragons would hang out. ;)
<Derek> Care to throw a guess?
<imamelia> Burning Mountain, maybe?
<imamelia> Or even in the forest.
<Derek> Yep.
<Derek> Burning Mountain will be one of their main homes.
<Derek> Among other fire-like creations that help keep most of the mountain on fire. Not all of it burns but a good portion is on fire. The creatures there have adapted to the land and have abilities to keep it that way.
<imamelia> Cool.
<Derek> Not many humans dare go in. After all, who wants to live near a big hot rock?
<Derek> Kingrayons are a different story. After all, they aren't quite human anymore. Though most of their humanity remains.

<Derek> I think Shadow Bark is one of my favorite names so far as well as the area.
<Derek> In my own descriptions of the land:
<Derek> "It is a forest darkened by the many trees that make all the bark look like shadows. Many creatures here take advantage of the shadows and the shadow-like bark and can almost disappear in the shadows at will."
<Derek> Yet strangely there appears to be enough light for lots of plants to grow.
<Derek> Though they must have adapted to survive the very little light or learned a trick to gain energy otherwise.


Now there's many other things to discuss. One of the things to discuss is how some of the wild life is like. There's many normal creatures and animals from Earth but there's many experiments Mazon made Chester do. From dragons, to fierce wolves that have more than meets the eye, to even elementals controlled by tortured humans that absorbed an insane amount of energy from the Albu de Folraise.

The world is a huge area of not only beauty, but war. There's many factions of experiments and even that of humans. From the rebellion against Lord Mazon, to Lord Mazon's Army, there's many sides to take. One of the people leading the rebellion against Lord Mazon is Waylen, Leasha, and Sidney. There's also many more indirect forces at play and many more that join in later.

Mazon isn't the only threat against both worlds. Kingrayons, although many don't want to fight, are seen as just weapons of war. Mazon's greatest weapon against everyone involves controlling Kingrayons and eventually turning all of humanity into them. There's some Kingrayons that have self-brainwashed themselves into believing that all of humanity is evil regardless of their alignment and has made all out war against any human they see. And then there's Kingrayons who have strong disagreement over this and thus have wars among themselves.

Then there's the dragons Mazon has made. Using Dark Diamond for their scales and after some alterations here and there, several dragon types have been created. Dragons were created as creatures of peace and to balance their specific 'aspect' or element. They have absorbed a superior amount of energy of the Albu de Folraise compared to even Kingrayons. There were around ten main aspects. Many of the aspects have either been forgotten or lost further in Planet Destiny (Meaning that they are somewhere in the Great Unknown.)

Currently there's now only 3 known aspects. One of fire, one of earth, and one of water. Each of the aspects have a name that has great power attached to it but it has been long forgotten. The dragons were said to be so powerful, not even Mazon with his current power could control them with his own twistedness.



I'll post more later if I get to it. For more updates, feel free to visit my site's wiki and also /dimensionproject/maps/ for some up to date maps. I plan on doing lots of work and details of the immense world of Destiny. I am still working out artwork so nothing can be revealed yet because I am picky of first impressions.

Edit: And please, feel free to ask questions about the world or a specific area! Questions about things fuel me. Just sayin'.

I always love to read the work of fellow authors! I will be sure to read this when I next have free time!

I'm moving this to Writing, as it would make more sense there.