Yoshi's adventure to save someone - by BroDute

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Reasons for removal:

This game, overall, is good design-wise, but there were things that deterred me from accepting it.


^ I really don't think you need the coins there. They might make players think that they're there to indicate a platform which actually does not exist.


^ I think it would be nicer if you put a platform under the midway gate there, because the player has to come all the way back to this point if he passes the gate, and it would kind of be evil if he collected coin-fied munchers in a way that will make all remaining munchers hard to avoid.


^ Yosheh standing on water..!? o_o
Not really a removal reason but this could definitely be something you might want to consider fixing.


^ These thwimps are a bit tricky to dodge probably due to you placing them in narrow paths and making them have colors that sort of blend in with the background.


^ "persons" should be "people". Always check if your messages are written correctly both spelling and grammar wise. Also, if I were you, I would word the first sentence "This castle was abandoned in 1775", just to make it concise.


^ Oh my. Too many sprites on one, single screen @_@!
Make the boss spawn less sprites, please.


^ Oh no. The boss is beaten now but the level doesn't end! The player has to wait for all of the sprites on the screen to disappear/die in order for the level to end. This really isn't a good idea, because the whole point of a boss fight is to beat the boss, isn't it? You should make the level end as soon as the boss gets beaten. I am 99.9% sure that there is a way to do that with ASM.

As I said, you've got some good levels, and I enjoyed playing them, but there are definitely parts that could be improved a whole lot. Also, you should think of a different title for this hack, because at the moment, it really doesn't sound all that interesting. Oh, and sorry that it took so long for this to get moderated.

What do you guys think?

Nice moderating. Most of the reasons were pretty minor but definitely the boss battle one is something that should be fixed.

I feel the need to point out that persons is proper grammar, even though it doesn't look right in that context it's still correct.

I do agree "persons" looks very out of place and should be "people" I just wanted to point out that it is proper grammar.

Oh!Mamamia!

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My English NOT very well!

Mama mia let me go.

I'll third "people" as I'm a native English speaker.

Fourthing (is that even a word?) people, although persons would certainly be unique.

- BlackMageMario

I've been speaking English since I entered preschool and I've never heard or seen people using "persons" as the plural of "people", so it struck me as odd when I first read the message.

I would still recommend using "people", even if "persons" is acceptable. "people" is commonly used to indicate more than one person, so.. I don't know. If you guys think "persons" is okay to be used, BroDute, just completely ignore what I said in the removal log.


Also, mind telling me what this post was for?
You've been making meaningless posts like this in other threads, and they're starting to get kind of annoying. If you want to post, you're always welcome to. Just please, post something that is rich in content. If you continue doing this you might get banned, and that is something we don't like to do.

Thanks,

Well, he's already been tempbanned, so the next step would most likely be permaban, but...

He's Chinese. Due to the huge firewall in China, he's probably not used to a forum enviornment, especially in English. However, according to Google Translate (not taken at face value of course) he doesn't make sense even in his native language.