Still playing demo 4 from your hack, now finished World 4. Arid Heights Levels contained fast paced action which made them a challenge. Good job! Cerise Volcano levels introduce
orange cement blocks which can hurt Luigi when standing too much time over them
, which I think putting them make the level great. Small issues found:
Not sure but I think that vine in Arid Heights 2 is not necessary:
Grammar issues:
If is not necessary there while Luigi and Mega Man D are talking to Buff in Arid Heights 3:
I would change
I can for
Can I and an
? next to
you...:
Instead of
personnel it would be
personal:
The shouldn't be there, being just:
Mario's twin Brother?:
In #4 Bowser's Castle,
the is used wrong as in the previous screenshot. The correct would be:
Is Bowser using the Supercrown?
. Also change
told for
tell:
Change
having for
had:
World 5 finished. Again, new ideas and good level design. Nipticks and issues:
In the bonus room from Lustful Beehive, getting the coins can be difficult when you have a bee chasing Luigi:
Waiting for the spikes going up while another bee chases Luigi can be tough:
Unexpected spike, maybe an indicator?:
In Starry Sky Canyon 1, if you don't know about the movement of Chucks, you may have trouble, though it's not hard if you know that:
Grammar issue in text boss from Starry Sky Canyon 2, change
are for
is:
Also, it's not hard to find the secret exit, but an indicator for some people would be good.
Finally you can skip the end of the lift travel when having a Feather Cape:
And now for some grammar mistakes in #5 Mineral Temple, when talking to Shad/Ninja Dusk:
1.Correct ones would be:
You were brainwashed too? and
Those delightful dorks...
2.It's time
to teach you good manners
3. I would recommend deleting way and just changing
painful for
painfully:
4. Not a grammar mistake, but when
Ninja Dusk becomes invisible, item from the box doesn't escape
:
5.How
dissapointing is the correct one:
6.Again
renember, correct one
remember
7.How did you
escape...:
Minor issues, but still a great world!
World 6 done, it was a great world with some awesome ideas (like
blue platforms which make Luigi jump
in Blue Springimmicks and Rouxls Kaard Level when
you have to solve puzzles
)
Most of the issues (which are small are related to grammar):
1. In Winter Panorama the same text from Mega Man D repeats twice. Also the correct one would be:
Don't touch in and
for a couple of seconds not
in:
2. In
of Rouxls Kaard you should add
to before
hit:
You could put here:
What did you do to him? or
What have you done to him?:
Gave, not
give and
be before
able:
You missed an
a, it's INITI
ALIZING:
3. In Clockwork Fortress,
too and
the wouldn't be necessary:
Not a grammar issue, but I think it could be a good idea to introduce how
work, or maybe I don't remember?
4. In Blue Springimmicks, England Knight's tip contains a very minor issue. The correct one is I not i:
5. Again not a grammar issue but in Winter Meadows, that Blowing Cloud made Luigi going through the floor, not so minor issue but not big either:
6. In #6 Winter Hideout, Merla should say Did you enjoy
ed:
Put
Let me see or
Let's see:
An extra minor issue I found, you can access Amethyst Mansion without playing Basilisk Forest:
Apart from that, this is one of the best worlds in the hack. Great job!