Still playing demo 4 from your hack, now finished World 4. Arid Heights Levels contained fast paced action which made them a challenge. Good job! Cerise Volcano levels introduce
orange cement blocks which can hurt Luigi when standing too much time over them
, which I think putting them make the level great. Small issues found:
Not sure but I think that vine in Arid Heights 2 is not necessary:
is not necessary there while Luigi and Mega Man D are talking to Buff in Arid Heights 3:
I would change I can
for Can I
and an ?
next to you...
Instead of personnel
it would be personal
shouldn't be there, being just: Mario's twin Brother?
In #4 Bowser's Castle, the
is used wrong as in the previous screenshot. The correct would be: Is Bowser using the Supercrown?
. Also change told
World 5 finished. Again, new ideas and good level design. Nipticks and issues:
In the bonus room from Lustful Beehive, getting the coins can be difficult when you have a bee chasing Luigi:
Waiting for the spikes going up while another bee chases Luigi can be tough:
Unexpected spike, maybe an indicator?:
In Starry Sky Canyon 1, if you don't know about the movement of Chucks, you may have trouble, though it's not hard if you know that:
Grammar issue in text boss from Starry Sky Canyon 2, change are
Also, it's not hard to find the secret exit, but an indicator for some people would be good.
Finally you can skip the end of the lift travel when having a Feather Cape:
And now for some grammar mistakes in #5 Mineral Temple, when talking to Shad/Ninja Dusk:
1.Correct ones would be: You were brainwashed too?
and Those delightful dorks...
2.It's time to
teach you good manners
3. I would recommend deleting way and just changing painful
4. Not a grammar mistake, but when
Ninja Dusk becomes invisible, item from the box doesn't escape
is the correct one:
, correct one remember
7.How did you escape
Minor issues, but still a great world!
World 6 done, it was a great world with some awesome ideas (like
blue platforms which make Luigi jump
in Blue Springimmicks and Rouxls Kaard Level when
you have to solve puzzles
Most of the issues (which are small are related to grammar):
1. In Winter Panorama the same text from Mega Man D repeats twice. Also the correct one would be: Don't touch
and for a couple of seconds
of Rouxls Kaard you should add to
You could put here: What did you do to him?
or What have you done to him?
You missed an a
, it's INITIA
3. In Clockwork Fortress, too
wouldn't be necessary:
Not a grammar issue, but I think it could be a good idea to introduce how
work, or maybe I don't remember?
4. In Blue Springimmicks, England Knight's tip contains a very minor issue. The correct one is I not i:
5. Again not a grammar issue but in Winter Meadows, that Blowing Cloud made Luigi going through the floor, not so minor issue but not big either:
6. In #6 Winter Hideout, Merla should say Did you enjoy
Put Let me see
or Let's see
An extra minor issue I found, you can access Amethyst Mansion without playing Basilisk Forest:
Apart from that, this is one of the best worlds in the hack. Great job!